As I was walking along I saw a dog and it was standing
on the edge of the bank watching something under the
water.
‘What is it looking at?’ I thought.
All of a sudden the dog jumped into the water and
then jumped out again.
“What on earth?” I said aloud.
“Huh?” said my sister looking at her phone.
“Nothing,” I said.
The dog jumped back in again, and out, and in.
‘Where did the dog go?’ I thought.
All of a sudden I heard a muffled YELP!! coming
from under the water...
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