Monday, May 25, 2020

100WC - Week #35 - Chloe

¨Buddy  where are you?” Oh no i´ve lost him. “Coco come here”  No i've lost her to what is Mum going to say.””Hey kid what are you doing in the woods?” “FOX!! run Coco””hey i just want to”” eat us.””No I want to help””no you what to help then eat us””No I would like to help”one chance””ok””Buddy i do not trust this fox.””Coco can you please gave her one chance?””ok”here is my lake” “wow it is so cool””water I’ll just drink it.””Coco we should go home”“thanks.”
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1 comment:

  1. Sandrine PacMay 31, 2020 at 8:17 AM

    A great suspense piece. Just make sure your punctuation is correct so it is easier to read. Well done!

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