Wednesday, May 20, 2020

100WC-Week# 34 Alex

¨ What¨ I mutter to myself ¨Who did this¨ there were Racoon carcasses hung up on the and the walls of the tunnel. In grief I walked around, in the center of the tunnel was a box,? then… it  opened slowly,when it was fully opened there was just a leaf, so I pressed on. I walked only two meters before hearing something being bashed into the ground, something  wooden, then there were splinters in front of me  and oblivious  to the broken chair. As I reached the end of the tunnel the sky was black,fright filled my body

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1 comment:

  1. AnonymousMay 24, 2020 at 9:52 AM

    Dear Alex,
    This is a great start to a story that can go beyond the 100 words of this challenge. You could develop it in so many ways.

    Keep writing!
    Mrs. Silver
    Team 100
    Illinois, USA

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