It was a regularly hot day as I looked on the clock and it was only 12.00. I was so bored. I asked Mum if we could get a lime thick shake but she said ¨No you can go get some ice instead.¨
¨Why?¨ I groaned back at Mum
¨Because its too unhealthy for you." Now the sun was like a flame as it burnt my skin, sweat ran down face and my clothes stuck to my skin, My face was red like a cherry as I lay down on the couch. Now it was 20 past 12 and I still add nothing to do.
Wednesday, August 8, 2018
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I really liked how you described how your face was is red as a cherry.
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