One day I was in the woods and I saw a pink river or was it pink stairs, but whatever that was, I had never seen it before in the woods, I walked up to it, I touched it.
“Ahhhhhhhhhh!” I screamed it was both it was a pink river, and pink stairs I was nervous, I went up the pink stairs / pink river.
“WOW! this place is amazing” I said to myself when I got to the top of the pink stairs / pink river I found a pink deer getting cooked over a fire I saw a shadow coming out from behind a bush ...
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