Tuesday, August 7, 2018

Special Prompt #3 - Nandani

It was a regularly day, I meant it was a regularly hot, sunshine day. The sun shone bright on the the stain glass window of our house.  Mike and Jayden ( MIke's  friend) were drinking lemon lime soda and they pretend that I was their servant but no.  Then suddenly a flame started on the carpet, Mum and Mike’s Mum walked start in and saw the mess.
OH NO.

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2 comments:

  1. AnonymousAugust 12, 2018 at 4:13 PM

    i enjoyed reading this because your how you described i felt like i was their perhaps next time you shouldn't put capitals
    in the middle of a word

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  2. AnonymousSeptember 4, 2018 at 2:20 PM

    WOW great story nandani
    i like how you put mike's friend in brackets. very interesting

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