Monday, August 13, 2018

Special Prompt #4 - Trent Allen

The Phone Call

It was 1941. The time of World War 2. I was in my home built out of wood and metal. I was old, tired and lonely. I had been sitting on my big rocking chair when the phone rang. I answered it. It was my old General. “YOU NEED TO COME BACK INTO THE FIELD.” He yelled 
“Why would i do that? I am retired.” 
BECAUSE YOUR COUNTRY DEPENDS ON IT.” Just then I realised a plane was flying past and a bomb dropped out. I got on the phone. "Okay" I said "but i need the best men you have.

 By Trent

3 comments:

  1. hi trent
    I like the way you but the words that got shouted in bold letters
    by morgan

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  2. That was a great use of words Trent, I also liked all the great punctuation Great job.

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  3. good job Trent I really like your story good job on using bold letters for when they are shouting and also good job on making a new line when the next person speaks
    good job
    Thanks Olivia

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