Wednesday, August 8, 2018
Special Prompt #3 - Marissa Brown
Tick tock goes the clock. I have been here just watching a flame on a candle, watching the ice melt over the top of the candle. "BANG BANG" on the door, then the door opens. Its my sister, I think to myself, what would my sister want? OH she has a lime in her hand OH NO she is coming to me and then "AWWWWWWWWWW" as she put the lime in my eyes "STOP STOP" I yelled. She would do this to me regularly so it didn't surprise me.
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ReplyDeleteHi Marissa
ReplyDeleteI really liked your story especially the part how you explained when your sister put the lime in your eyes. Before you publish the writing please read it out loud.
Hayley,student,Morrinsville New Zealand.
Hi Marissa
ReplyDeleteI really liked the way you used your words that you had to use because you spread them out unlike me. But I think you need to work on the way you use capital letters because you used a lot in that writing.
From Lucy.