One day I was playing with a flame. I melted ice it was so satisfying, just watching it turn into water. Mum comes in "Laine what are you doing? That was the last bit of ice we had, what were you thinking?" Mum was so angry, it wasn't just regular anger. I was looking at the clock, "what do I do?" I said to myself. I need to think of something to do, fast. I'm getting so bored. That's what I´ll do, eat some lime. It was so sour!
Tuesday, August 7, 2018
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Hi laine I really liked how you conpinde all of the words in your story.The bit I was looking at the clock, "what do I do?" I said to myself. I need to think of something to do, fast. I'm getting so bored. That's what I´ll do, eat some lime. It was so sour! dosen't really make seacne.
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i like how you played with fire and melted ice it was cool
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