"Hey what did I do?" I went to go and I cooked some pancakes and they were really yummy and then once I have eaten them all I went to the River and it was really bumpy and cold.
The next day my house walls where all PINK . I didn't know how they got PINK so then I went to change them back to white and I was so happy that they were back to white and then I left it alone.
OH NO I spilt the PINK paint all over my floor and I tried to clean it up and then the next day I saw Something and I don't know what it is so the I left it alone and went to go and do some other things.
The next day I saw something and I was so nervous and I don't know what it was so then I went back to what I was doing.
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